Me, Taking a Writing Prompt to the Cheesiest-Extreme

It was a Dark and Stormy Night

by

Rachel

Current Revisions by

Rachel, May, 2009

EXT. SKYSCRAPER ROOF – DEAD OF NIGHT

Someone’s sneakered feet, walking slowly, step by step across dirty roof. Litter scuffs around hems of jeans, which are tattered. A beer can rolls by.

ALEX (V.O.)

For every human being, there is a time when you are called out of this life. When you close your eyes one final time, and draw your last breath... From there, you’re judged immediately: There are only two final destinations.

Heaven...

Tense MUSIC begins, softly, but with a loud beating of drums as “Heaven” is announced. Heavy single POUND of drums as: On adjacent building, blinding white flash of HEAVENLY LIGHT and a pair of delicate feet alight on the ledge. Zoom out to see TALL FIGURE, indistinct from being the source of HEAVENLY LIGHT, lands there. The POUND fades away.

ALEX (V.O.)

Or Hell.

On the word “Hell” EVIL CHANTING [not Gregorian] begins. On building across from first skyscraper, opposite second skyscraper, a purple pentacle flares into existence on the roof—lines are vivid purple, and burn with lots of BLACK FIRE. As camera follows pattern closer to the center, EVIL CHANTING gets louder. In the center, a pale, but ashen-grey, effeminate foot appears. EVIL CHANTING is loudest here, then is lowered to join DRUMS underneath V.O.

ALEX (V.O.)

These two forces fight for each and every soul, every single moment of the day. From the second you are conceived in the womb, to your very last breath, they wage a spiritual war over each individual soul. This war is unseen and goes mostly unnoticed by the public, but it is real, and it is vitally important. Souls, and the places where they will spend Eternity, are being fought over.

One side cherishes man and his purity, his goodness—the other loathes us with a hatred we cannot possibly imagine in our deepest, darkest nightmares.

And now...

A bronze-skinned hand grips the ruby hilt of his SWORD, while the owner of the ash-grey foot GROWLS LIKE A BEAST and SNARLS VICIOUSLY. Flames SNAP and CRACKLE.

Alex (V.O.)

The war has gone public.

EPIC BATTLE MONTAGE

-BACKGROUND MUSIC BLASTS then SILENCES. Zoom out to show FIGURE IN LIGHT and FIGURE IN FLAMES. FIGURE IN LIGHT draws sword and a smoky wave of power like at Sauron’s Destruction in LOTR. At same moment as sword is gripped, FIGURE IN FLAMES crouches down—leaps like an animal at the very moment the sword is drawn.

-LOUD, FRANTIC MUSIC begins as the two figures collide in mid-air above the third figure, ALEX, wearing jeans, sneakers, and a hoodie. ALEX is facing camera, back to the collision. His head is facing down, bangs in face and hood up, hiding his eyes.

-Alex’s hood is blown back and the sides of the sweatshirt flap in the force-wind generated by the unsheathing of the SWORD.

-HEAVENLY FIGURE and DEMON separate, and DEMON pulls wings in to body and dives into the city. There is no shadow as it passes by mirror-like windows, but glass ices over.

-ANGEL follows in close pursuit, sword at side.

-DEMON twirls past cars, which crash into each other, or break down; DRIVERS come out and shout at each other indistinctly

-ANGEL follows, and where its HEAVENLY GLOW falls the arguments quiet.

-DEMON corkscrews into an alley, where a GANG is cornering a woman. DEMON’s wing touches GANGSTA #1 as it passes by, and GANGSTA #1 shouts at the woman and waves a gun.

-ANGEL passes by and lifts a wing to avoid touching GANGSTA#1, but as ANGEL passes GUARDIAN ANGEL appears behind GANGSTA#1 and whispers something in his ear. GANGSTA#1 calms down and throws the gun in a dumpster and runs away, followed by GANG.

-DEMON spins upwards into the sky, then dives RIGHT PAST the ANGEL’s face. We see their features clearly: ANGEL has BANG-OUT-OF-THIS-WORLD BLUE eyes, and straight, Sunflower-Yellow hair. Chiseled features.

-DEMON has once-pale skin that’s now charred with ashes, and his face looks like it’s been smeared with charcoal. Features are feline, but still relatively humanoid—but the eyes are INSANE, FIREY RED, with SNAKE-SLITS for pupils. His hair is grimy, stringy, and seems to have encrusted blood in it—but it’s blond.

-ANGEL turns on a dime and follows DEMON through an empty, litter-covered street that’s surrounded by dilapidated old houses.

-DEMON looks over shoulder. ANGEL is nowhere in sight. DEMON lands and skids, then turns and crouches as if to take off again—then RECOILS and HISSES FURIOUSLY as there is a burst of HEAVENLY LIGHT

-ANGEL LUNGES LIKE LIGHTNING at the DEMON and Demon lifts a hand decked with long, razor like claws. WALL OF BLACK FIRE flares up, but ANGEL’S SWORD slashes through it and his foot slams into DEMON’S chest, pinning DEMON to the cement. ANGEL’S sword is raised just behind its head, pointed at DEMON like St. Michael Statues.

-We end on the DEMON’S scream of rage.

END MONTAGE

We are now back on the roof, looking at ALEX’S front. His head is still facing his shoes. His hair blows and his entire jacket is blow off as WING BEATS are heard off-screen. MUSIC has died down to soft LotR-Elf-Like vocals. Soften further as VOICE speaks.

SOMBER VOICE (O.C.)

Alexander.

ALEX raises and turns head over shoulder to gaze at ANGEL: revealing one VIBRANT GREEN eye, and the right of a pair of VIVIDLY WHITE wings.

(Pause)

Zoom out as ALEX turns his head.

SILENCE as ALEX tips forward off the edge of the roof.

CUT TO ALEX’s face as his bangs blow completely away from his face, just before he actually falls off the roof.

Lock on to ALEX’s eyes; fade out everything else into darkness, leaving his EERILY BRIGHT mismatched eyes of Slitted-Pupil RUBY and EMERALD GREEN.

FADE TO BLACK.

Beautiful piano MUSIC plays in the background.

Girl (V.O.)

(Innocently)

Are you an angel?

ALEX (V.O.)

(Bitterly, with vehemence)

No. Nothing of the sort.